need advice on a 1250 point army please

hi all i have made up a 1250 army list to use in a torniment and i would like some advice on how people think it will work

hq
urien rakarth 190 points i am takeing rakarth as he allows me to take wraks as troops he is allso a pain to kill and can hold his own in any dual.

eletes
kabalite trueborn x5 in a venom upgrades night sheild splinter cannon for the venom and 4 blaster and a dark lance for the trueborn

troop
wraks x 9 rakarth in a raider 1 liquifiyers and night sheild
wraks x 10 in a raider 2 liquifiyers
kabalite warriors x 20 2x dark lance
kabalite warriors x 5 venom splinter cannon night sheild 1x blaster

hevery serport
ravager dark lance x 2 disintergrator cannon x 1

should be 1250

the 20 warriors will hold up a ruine or building that will have a objective inside it allso the will draw in other players who will see this as the main force of my army and will want to try and kill them. the 2 venoms will use there 12 splinter shots each to cut down oposition troops serported by the ravager and the 20 warriors. the wraks will move around the table useing the speed of there veichels to keep out of trubble and when the time is write there will move flat out to the opnents deployment zone takeing out his shooting force with liquifiyers and then asaults allso captyering objectives and geting line breakers.
so what do people think is this a workable idea or do you guys have any good tactics i could add to it thanks in advance

ecam wrote:

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urien rakarth 190 points i am takeing rakarth as he allows me to take wraks as troops he is allso a pain to kill and can hold his own in any dual.

For a tournament any HQ you expose is likely to end up dead. Urien is OK, but I'd much rather take a normal Haem. Less points and easy to hide. Urien really only does well in lists built around his gimmick.

ecam wrote:

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kabalite trueborn x5 in a venom upgrades night sheild splinter cannon for the venom and 4 blaster and a dark lance for the trueborn

This is terrible. The dark lance wants to stay still, the blasters want to move. The ranges are different and so are the way you use them. Either go with 4 blasters OR 2 Dark Lances, don't mix them.

ecam wrote:

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wraks x 9 rakarth in a raider 1 liquifiyers and night sheild

Night shield isn't worth it if you want to close, the unit isn't worth it if you want to hang back. Otherwise perfectly fine.

ecam wrote:

wraks x 10 in a raider 2 liquifiyers

This unit is OK.

ecam wrote:

kabalite warriors x 20 2x dark lance

This unit is really not good. It is hard to hide, easy to kill and expensive. 3 Wracks held in reserve are a better scoring unit. 2 Dark Lances on 3 Trueborn would give you the same firepower. Rather than 230 points that comes to 116, much more economical.

ecam wrote:

kabalite warriors x 5 venom splinter cannon night sheild 1x blaster

Night shield isn't worth it if you want to close.

ecam wrote:

hevery serport
ravager dark lance x 2 disintergrator cannon x 1

Pick lances or disintegrators, don't mix them, either build this unit as anti infantry or anti tank. Night shields are worth it here.

Would you rather play assault or shooty? Let us know and I can give you some advice on improving the build.

thanks for the reply i am looking to make a shooting army and will be giveing them a test run in my local gw store as the torniment is not until the end of october wich gives me time to iron out and change any cracks.
as to the list i have made its realy only version 1 i have used it 2 times agenst a friend who plays blood angels and i won both games by turn 4. the night sheilds i put onto my veichels to give them some protection if i dont get first turn or its not night fighting from turn 1 as i find people tend to try and keep there shooty units at max distance after turn 1 i realise its pointles as i will allways have a jink save
as for rakarth i just love the hq wich is the main reason i am takeing him lol
like i say it is only version 1 of my army list and can prity much change anything so any imput is apreshated