Kabal of the Poisoned Thorn

Kabal of the Poisoned Thorn

“We are the thorn in the foot of the beast where it cannot reach, the thorn that niggles, infects and poisons the black heart till it beats no more” The Mirror Archon - Kabal of the Poisoned Thorn

Appearing almost overnight around 200 years ago The Kabal of the Poisoned Thorn or ‘the Thorn’ as they are often referred are an apparently small kabal who openly oppose the iron rule of Asdrubal Vect. Why Vect has not crushed the thorn is a subject of great discussion amongst the other Kabals, Cults and Covens three main theories exist.

1) The Thorn is small and unworthy of the attention of Vect as to give it attention would give it justification.
2) The Thorn has some hold over Vect himself.
3) The Thorn is a ploy by Vect to root out larger threats to his rule.

Whatever the answer neither Vect or the Mirror Archon is saying.

Membership

The Thorn is made up of members from all social strata of Commorragh their exists no social limitations within the Thorn promotion is based solely on individual ability this can lead to viscous infighting but results in the best candidate for the job having it (usually with many corpses greasing the way). With such a progressive way of thinking the kabal attracts a lot of talented if lowborn members.

Also unlike many kabals the title of archon is granted to the five members of the ‘council of reflections’ whom make all decisions regarding the future of the Kabal guided by the Mirror Archon himself.

The Mirror Archon is an enigma a figure in resplendent armour whom has never been seen without his helmet a domed mirrored affair which reflects and distorts the image of those looking at it. The Mirror Archon is a master strategist and manipulator his network of agents and spies or the ‘roots’ as he calls them have helped him to gather damaging information on nearly all the players in Commorragh, information used to secure an otherwise delicate position in Commorraghs society for such a small kabal.


Please note I am by no means a fluff writer but I've attempted to get the basic ideas about my army down

When going into battle the Thorn gathers it’s troops, enlisting cults, gangs and covens and issues them all with armour in the colours of the kabal this allows some degree of anonymity for those moonlighting for the kabal and provides the kabal with a unified force. It is also important to note that the armour provided is impregnated by a viscous toxin that destroys the host at a genetic level should he not receive the antidote upon returning to Commorragh this fact is not hidden and is the price of doing business with the Thorn. So why would anyone work for the Thorn? Quite simply the Thorn offers a unique sharing of spoils scheme the full rules of which form a tome made of the skin of traitors to the kabal 1ft thick. Basic troops earn far more from working for the Thorn than anywhere else, specialists get an enhanced rate and the promotion prospects go far beyond that available anywhere else.

The Poisoned Thorns holdings in Commorragh are relatively small but well protected both physically and politically. Many of the major Kabals would love to remove the thorn but the Mirror Archon has information and secrets on all of them.

The Thorn is able to call upon the services of nearly any cult, coven, or gang they choose. In addition they seem to have an almost inexhaustible supply of vehicles and weaponry

Nice. Well organized and thoughtful. I can't wait to see how you develop these guys more.

Some thoughts and suggestions:
-Stray away from absolutes. Instead of saying all, say most. It makes you sound more credible.
-Instead of appearing all of a sudden, which is cliche, perhaps a revision to the following: "200 years ago the other Kabals took notice of...", or some such.
-Being made up from all social strata makes your Kabal seem very gang-like. Even with Vect's coupe, status is important in the Dark City. If that's what you're going for, awesome! And if it is what you're going for, expand on it. Make it yours and run with it.
-Details are your friend. The more the merrier. How is the Mirror Archon's armor resplendent? Is it super shiny? Is it made from a rare metal? Etc.
-Going back to the absolutes. If your Kabal had secrets on everyone, someone would eventually consider you too big of a risk and simply wipe you out. Go with generalities again. Your Kabal treasures secrets and rumors. Your Kabal has dirt on many Kabals. Perhaps even your Kabal does the dirty work for other Kabals in exchange for secrets and whatnot.

I love your impregnated poison thing on your armor. It adds a nice personal touch. I love your Kabal's rules in a tome bound in the skin of traitors. It needs a name. Something that epic deserves a name. Like the Manifest of Blahblahblah. Obviously, Blahblahblah is not cool, but you know what I mean.

Another Vect hater tickles my cockles so. Yes. Tickles them.